33 Acquisition

I was so anxious to see what won this year, that I pre-ordered the anthology two weeks before scheduled release and jumped right to the Golden Pen story almost the moment the book downloaded to my phone's Kindle app.

Jake Marley's urban fantasy paranormal occult thriller is quite a good read. The milestones follow, in two tables, as usual: the first, of exerpts; the second, of summaries.

 

Stats Symbol Point Type Milestones # Milestone Division Select Content
Pre Calibration Hook 1a Enticing Incident 2130 Just after midnight and Barlow was on that stretch of I-15 between Baker and Vegas and he felt the pull of the dead.
2129 1b Exciting Incident 2146.1 She pulled her smooth, tanned legs up onto the seat and hugged her knees.
First Threat Inciting Incident 2a a 2163.3 Three miles and none of the usual signs.
2130 2b b 2180.4 "There are buyers in Las Vegas."
End Decision Plot Turn 1 3a a 2197.5 When Barlow tired of them, he sold his pieces to real collectors.
2403 3b b 2214.6 Barlow's hand shook as he poured himself a coffee, and he had to use a handful of napkins to clean up the spill.
Total Threat Pinch Point  2 4a a 2231.8 Patience, he thought, and this time it was his own voice he heard, not Karen's.
274 4b b 2248.9 Gravel and sand crunched underfoot.
Av Dist Decision Plot Turn 2 5a a 2266 They can tear you apart.
17.125 5b b 2283.1 She was a genuine celebrity--heiress to a fortune, and ripped away from that tabloid world by unanswered questions and unfound evidence.
Division Threat Pinch Point 2 6a a 2300.3 "She's not. Just look at her."
Select 6b b 2317.4 The talisman burned against his chest and he wanted to tear it off, to scream at his wife that she should've been here.
  Decision Plot Turn 3 7a a 2334.5 Alyssa screamed at the sky, and the stars appeared, pushing through the layers of night, of filth and pollution, to shine just for her.
  7b b 2351.6 He held his ground against her.
  Threat Deciding Incident 8a a 2368.8 "I'm sorry," Barlow said, but he wasn't.
  8b b 2385.9 He led her into a back room with a a view of the encroaching desert--a wilderness waiting to reclaim Los Angeles when humanity finally leaves.
  Calibration Conclusion 9 Conclusion 2403 Alyssa pulled, and the room was filled with light.

 

 

Stats Symbol Point Type Milestones # Milestone Division Select Content
Pre Calibration Hook 1a Enticing Incident 2130 Barlow feels the pull of the dead.
2129 1b Exciting Incident 2146.1 Alyssa tells Barlow she'd tried for a long time to flag someone down.
First Threat Inciting Incident 2a a 2163.3 They've driven three miles and Barlow has seen none of the usual signs.
2130 2b b 2180.4 Barlow tells Alyssa he might sell her or keep her.
End Decision Plot Turn 1 3a a 2197.5 Barlow met Karen through the collectors.
2403 3b b 2214.6 Barlow is tense as he drinks a cup of coffee.
Total Threat Pinch Point  2 4a a 2231.8 Barlow resents being called a scavenger, but tells himself to have patience.
274 4b b 2248.9 Barlow searches the desert for Alyssa's body.
Av Dist Decision Plot Turn 2 5a a 2266 Karen tells Barlow the ghosts are beings of pure emotion which can haunt him and tear him apart.
17.125 5b b 2283.1 Barlow unovers Alyssa's corpse.
Division Threat Pinch Point 2 6a a 2300.3 Barlow walks away with Alyssa's hand.
Select 6b b 2317.4 Barlow runs from Alyssa, who is extremely powerful.
  Decision Plot Turn 3 7a a 2334.5 Alyssa controls the weather.
  7b b 2351.6 Barlow tells Alyssa he's trying to save her.
  Threat Deciding Incident 8a a 2368.8 Barlow tells his agent he won't sell Alyssa.
  8b b 2385.9 Barlow takes Alyssa home so she can help him release the ghosts in his collection.
  Calibration Conclusion 9 Conclusion 2403 Alyssa releases Karen.

 

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